Alright. I know some of these things I can't say because I do them myself, but here you go.
Title: First of all one of the things for me that first pops out about a song is it's title. "Delerium x Tygrysek - AnIntenseJourney.docx" isn't a very appealing title unless you're a GD fan or you just like weird titles I guess..? I don't know how to explain it very well but it just doesn't fit something like this very much.
Mixing: The mixing was almost good, just needs some work. It feels cramped and shoved all into one, it doesn't flow good- Some of the parts were louder than others, almost ear shredding at normal volume. Otherwise it's meh.
Melody: The melodies and instruments used in both parts were bad choices. I could hear the default FL piano in there (or nexus idk) which makes me think it's made unprofessionally. The piano and trancey kind of sounds don't fit with your bass. The piano sticks out like a sore thumb opposed to what's actually supposed to be happening with the bass. The melodies for this song were off in parts and didn't sound just right either.
Overall 5/10 it's a good start
----------I feel like this only has 5* because it's hyped by the GD community-- No offense i'm a GD creator and player (ish) myself------------